There was a stranger
in my home.
They hid perfectly.
Lurking and snaking
through the shadows,
amusing themselves
with the thrill of
going unnoticed.
They watched silently.
Absorbing and observing
the miniscule details,
adding to their list
of evidential flaws.
And they searched intrusively.
Prying and peering
into the failed bits
and miserable pieces
of my daily life.
There was a stranger
in my home...But that stranger was me.
Powerful piece. I hope you don’t mind a tiny piece of constructive criticism (if you do, ignore this):
I think this might have been even more potent without the inclusion of the final line – leaves that tiny doubt in the reader’s head.
Enjoyed this though.
Interesting twist!!
I was wondering who’s that stranger, But I like how it’s ended.
Also, I love whatever I’ve read so far, looking forward to read more. I really think you are an amazing writer and poetess. Your words are beautiful and well written, with a balance of mystery and integrity.
Kudos
Nice poem 😊
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Thank you 🙂
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Lovely poem. When you are being stalked by yourself, you know it’s time to let go. 🙂
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Ayy! You always get it 🙂
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😊 I try! 💖
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You do a great job! 😉
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That was an unexpected twist. Nice one!
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Thank you!!!!
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Powerful piece. I hope you don’t mind a tiny piece of constructive criticism (if you do, ignore this):
I think this might have been even more potent without the inclusion of the final line – leaves that tiny doubt in the reader’s head.
Enjoyed this though.
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Thank you! Constructive criticism always welcome 🙂
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Interesting twist!!
I was wondering who’s that stranger, But I like how it’s ended.
Also, I love whatever I’ve read so far, looking forward to read more. I really think you are an amazing writer and poetess. Your words are beautiful and well written, with a balance of mystery and integrity.
Kudos
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Thank you so much ❤️ I really appreciate it and thank you for taking the time to read my stuff 🙂
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